Thursday, November 13, 2008

Legends of the Gold Rush

Party of one
at a table for two
checkin’ your watch
but this ain’t nothin’ new
it just means she’s done
you’ve nothin’ left for her
now that you’re broken
and puzzled and poorer

Hard to imagine
her sweet lips could lie,
or that she could leave
without tellin’ you why;
those cornflower eyes
she said were for you
were already searchin’
for somebody new.

From the hungry east they came
rode their poor plow horses lame
drawn out by the tales of wealth
for each man with grit and health

Boomtowns sprang up from the dust
but their promises went bust
many said it served them right
tryin’ to get rich overnight

Ain’t nothin’ you did
ain’t your fault at all
any man with his senses
is destined to fall
and give her whatever
she tells him she needs
and not even notice
the streams that he bleeds

Without word or warning
she’s just off and gone,
your wallet is empty,
your stuff’s on the lawn.
She ain’t comin’ back
but man trust me,
it’s better,
ain’t no heart of gold
in them hills
on her sweater.

From the hungry east they came
rode their poor plow horses lame
all they wanted, all the while
was for Lady Luck to smile

But she’s mighty hard to please
they discovered, on their knees -
many said they should’ve known,
gettin’ spellbound by a stone.

7 comments:

silly said...

"Without word or warning
she’s just off and gone,
your wallet is empty,
your stuff’s on the lawn."

this reminds me of Maverick 1994 - Mel Gibson, Jodie Foster ;)
...even though ur poem is no comedy!

I loved that movie, and love how ur words take me to that time and place...

silly said...

found a drop of comedy, here it is:

"She ain’t comin’ back
but man trust me,
it’s better,
ain’t no heart of gold
in them hills
on her sweater."

Damn right, it is better!

Moanerplicity said...

Ah yes! The ultimate femme fatale... only here she's risen to new, beauteously heartbreaking heights!

Love the wordplay just as much as I relate to the plight.

Well done!

One.

Scott Ennis said...

Nice juxtaposition.
Made me wonder if I'm always sincere or just a guy trying his luck.

K.Lawson Gilbert said...

Well constructed ballad poem. I enjoyed it very much.

You have innovative ideas for poetry and really pull them off by using great word choices and an artful approach.

I just wanted to say that I hope you are safe from the fires in southern CA. ;)

K.Lawson Gilbert said...

Joaquin - was wondering if I could put your link on Blogs I Visit on Old Mossy Moon? Please let me know. Thanks, K

joaquin carvel said...

K. - i would be happy to be a blog you visit, and honored to be linked from Old Mossy Moon. and thanks for your concern - apart from some smoke and blowing ash, the fires have (yet again) left me unscathed.