i’m quick to ask for grace
but i’m not a good forgiver,
the bridges hiss behind me
as they smolder in the river
feeling like i stole a life
so good it makes me shiver,
you can have my heart, my dear,
i’ll trade you for a liver
the silence here is ominous,
the eye inside the twister
that rips apart the trailer park
i built the day i kissed her
i’m quick to ask for honesty
but low enough to slither,
piss drunk in your cellar
as my thirsty vineyards whither
god came down and wrote my name
across the little dipper
and so i kissed him on the cheek
and punched him in the zipper
the silence here is ominous,
a dandelion whisper,
holding all I couldn’t say
that caught a breeze and missed her
i’m quick to ask for boundless love
but i’m no good to give it -
cocksure and wise, i proselytize,
too goddamn dumb to live it.
Thursday, October 9, 2008
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7 comments:
the first verse is just great, really sucked me in.
and i love this:
"the silence here is ominous,
the eye inside the twister
that rips apart the trailer park
i built the day i kissed her"
you put into words things that cross my mind all the time. your poems are a gift to the world that I very much appreciate.
:)
some pretty hot rhymin' there
missy
"i’m quick to ask for boundless love
but i’m no good to give it -
cocksure and wise, i proselytize,
too goddamn dumb to live it."
and so it is...
I really feel these words, and I'll quote you on that, be sure!
Your poems are pure joy :)
Mannnnnnnn... I so DIG your metaphors! Your way w/ words is as clever as a heyday Dylan with his songs.
Keep penning & winning!
One.
That fifth stanza continues to ring in my head after reading the poem. The 'zipper' line caught me so off guard I coughed a chuckle. (grin)
p.s.
I've included your previous poem, "Impulse Purchase", in a list of must-read ones, in my recent blog post. Just a heads up. Cheers.
what they all said...
"feeling like i stole a life
so good it makes me shiver,
you can have my heart, my dear,
i’ll trade you for a liver"
I love the parallelism here to the organ black market. Interesting work :) well done
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