Thursday, October 9, 2008

Miss Appropriation

sorry – this poem has been removed due to some delusional endeavor to get published. i’ll put it back once i come to my senses.


-confessional- said...

the first verse is just great, really sucked me in.

and i love this:
"the silence here is ominous,
the eye inside the twister
that rips apart the trailer park
i built the day i kissed her"

you put into words things that cross my mind all the time. your poems are a gift to the world that I very much appreciate.


Anonymous said...

some pretty hot rhymin' there

Silly Girl said...

"i’m quick to ask for boundless love
but i’m no good to give it -
cocksure and wise, i proselytize,
too goddamn dumb to live it."

and so it is...
I really feel these words, and I'll quote you on that, be sure!

Your poems are pure joy :)

Moanerplicity said...

Mannnnnnnn... I so DIG your metaphors! Your way w/ words is as clever as a heyday Dylan with his songs.

Keep penning & winning!


S.L. Corsua said...

That fifth stanza continues to ring in my head after reading the poem. The 'zipper' line caught me so off guard I coughed a chuckle. (grin)

I've included your previous poem, "Impulse Purchase", in a list of must-read ones, in my recent blog post. Just a heads up. Cheers.

maaga..... said...

what they all said...

Rax said...

"feeling like i stole a life
so good it makes me shiver,
you can have my heart, my dear,
i’ll trade you for a liver"

I love the parallelism here to the organ black market. Interesting work :) well done