tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7187683434790070953.post1448544299003050361..comments2024-01-30T03:00:57.176-08:00Comments on Lyrics & Maladies: El Doradojoaquin carvelhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03193680725157157864noreply@blogger.comBlogger9125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7187683434790070953.post-41245518538819379352010-07-01T08:31:28.722-07:002010-07-01T08:31:28.722-07:00julie - yep - they are the salt of the earth. than...julie - yep - they are the salt of the earth. thank you - coming from someone who captures and depicts them like you do, your comments are almost overwhelming. in the best possible way.<br /><br />nevine - no worries - as long as you make it back. thank you - glad you felt the connection in this. it's good to listen. and the awe is mutual. :)<br /><br />bkm - thank you! it is played out all over - seems like the good people get lost in all the bad news, but they're there, every day.<br /><br />aniket - i don't know - well, maybe "a star to steer her by". thank you. i'm glad it turned out so visual - it seems right for this one.<br /><br />karen - i can't tell you how glad i am that you come along for the ride. as for believability - that made my head spin a little. and then to mention papa hem and gabo - i don't think there could have been a greater compliment. thank you. <br /><br />sarah - shhhh. i won't be cool anymore if i get all popular. just kidding. seriously, though, i feel lucky to be able to share it with the people i do. thank you - i'm kind of partial to this one so it was hard to know if i should post it. glad i did.<br /><br />jannie - thank you. and these are some of the most moving comments ever - truly. happy you dropped in!joaquin carvelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03193680725157157864noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7187683434790070953.post-49422768931907984202010-06-30T18:13:07.337-07:002010-06-30T18:13:07.337-07:00You may think this is strange, but the poem remind...You may think this is strange, but the poem reminds me of Hemingway and Garcia Marquez combined. And I mean that as a great compliment.Karenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12003379181294550035noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7187683434790070953.post-23435449685007114562010-06-30T12:58:18.571-07:002010-06-30T12:58:18.571-07:00One of the mst moving poems ever, Joaquin.
Just s...One of the mst moving poems ever, Joaquin.<br /><br />Just so many lines I loved in this.<br /><br />Loved teh way the words black bars and boards and plaster rolled around in my mind.<br /><br />"keep a dead van running" is magical too, as "just the boat, the sky, the sea."<br /><br />just a stunner, simply beautiful -- loved it!!<br /><br />xoJannie Funsterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11595786402510366043noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7187683434790070953.post-60752750606756229432010-06-29T19:55:36.269-07:002010-06-29T19:55:36.269-07:00Sometimes I just feel lucky to read your work. Li...Sometimes I just feel lucky to read your work. Like it's a secret only a few of us are privileged to know. Gold and azure and open water...you paint it all. <br /><br />This is a stunning narrative poem. Tender and humble and flawless. It reads like a dream. Even on the fifth time around. :)<br /><br />That last stanza is transcendent. I really can't imagine anything more beautiful. I've sat here for a good many minutes trying to find the words. But it's all right there.Sarah Hinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13888406261817690010noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7187683434790070953.post-12015887944526035772010-06-29T17:56:47.145-07:002010-06-29T17:56:47.145-07:00This is a beautiful story, one that is so real to ...This is a beautiful story, one that is so real to me from your words that I wonder if it isn't real for you, too. <br /><br />One of the things that makes your poetry so vital is the richness of detail in each piece. Whether it is dialogue or local color, you are a true master of believability.<br /><br />Besides the richness and perfect narrative structure, the sound of your work is something I always look forward to and enjoy. <br /><br />As you so aptly state, "Rhyme is not a cryme!" I agree!! The sound is married to the story and is as important as any other part of it. In your case, the rhythm enhances the narrative every time. <br /><br />I can't tell you enough how I enjoy going along where you take me in your poems.Karenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12003379181294550035noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7187683434790070953.post-49198580019875828292010-06-29T06:25:24.465-07:002010-06-29T06:25:24.465-07:00'a boat, the sky and sea' - what else ther...'a boat, the sky and sea' - what else there is to ask for? <br /><br />Like others said the words paint the perfect pictures to <i>view</i> this piece. A beautiful story of life coming full circle.Aniket Thakkarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18311954967682696734noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7187683434790070953.post-26225677011268371962010-06-27T23:03:02.406-07:002010-06-27T23:03:02.406-07:00I love the whole story and see this whole story pl...I love the whole story and see this whole story play out everyday around my town.... but I really love the last stanza --<br /><br />but he's out in open water<br />casting nets toward Coronado<br /><br />I can just picture it.....bkmsigned...bkmhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03558304976280070986noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7187683434790070953.post-17375490855358206802010-06-27T10:55:37.882-07:002010-06-27T10:55:37.882-07:00So many things to love here, Joaquin. But I think ...So many things to love here, Joaquin. But I think what I enjoyed most was the communing of the spirits. Sometimes, in the silence, spirits and talking with spirits. Sometimes, we have to listen. That is why this is my favorite part:<br /><br />and the ocean shone like tarpon<br />and he felt his papa’s hand<br />like an angel on his shoulder<br />every time he left the land<br /><br />It's such a pleasure to be reading you again... I was gone too long, but it feels good to return to sharing such talented expression. I am always in awe of your talent!<br /><br />NevineNevine Sultanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08794887684860140819noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7187683434790070953.post-87126643741339602612010-06-25T15:08:15.176-07:002010-06-25T15:08:15.176-07:00Beautiful. You got me with the first line, and yo...Beautiful. You got me with the first line, and you hauled me in with the mangrove tree and net mending. I felt the sadness when the mangroves grew into hotels and the bars and boards and plaster took over. <br /><br />Then I could picture them in the old van, broken down on the side of the road, trying to keep it running. Sending money back home. Showing the gringos where to drop a line. The whole story flows like an awesome movie, and I can't stop watching it. I wouldn't want to stop watching it.<br /><br />You are wonderful at the telling of the story (the rhythm and voice), but the HUMAN elements of your stories are excellent. I know the people in this story, and I love them. They are truly the salt of the earth. A man who only needs the boat, the sky and sea--and passes that love down to his nephews--is tops in my book.<br /><br />This is a beautiful portrait, Joaquin. I can see him out on that open water casting nets, drenched in gold and azure. Forever.Juliehttp://juliebuff.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.com