tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7187683434790070953.post1151327575838686610..comments2024-01-30T03:00:57.176-08:00Comments on Lyrics & Maladies: Skinny Fingersjoaquin carvelhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03193680725157157864noreply@blogger.comBlogger17125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7187683434790070953.post-50887733979910025032009-05-15T00:00:00.000-07:002009-05-15T00:00:00.000-07:00so good.
it is my first time here and i enjoy eve...so good. <br />it is my first time here and i enjoy every moment of reading your stuff. it does all ring like a song and i do hope you have them somehow composed, would be great to hear.<br />i have allowed myself to add you to my blogroll as i would be happy to share your words with those few that come to my place (and as it will be much easyer for me too to keep on with it)<br />great days<br />DhyanAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7187683434790070953.post-54810787523860961242009-05-14T07:27:00.000-07:002009-05-14T07:27:00.000-07:00'skinny fingers' all the places makes it neatly go...'skinny fingers' all the places makes it neatly good...so i say 'its finger licking good' LOL..enough of my PJs...nice poem..yuppy moms are always right....Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7187683434790070953.post-64690452005068038872009-05-13T22:13:00.000-07:002009-05-13T22:13:00.000-07:00emptygarden - thanks!
aniket - ha! thank you - th...emptygarden - thanks!<br /><br />aniket - ha! thank you - though i think i may have gotten myself in deep with this - so it goes, i guess.<br /><br />Bros - the way to a man's heart is through his stomach, right? thanks!<br /><br />karen - thank you - "june & julep" was a last second change, so whew.<br /><br />julie - :D thank you - from one of the best storytellers i know of - anywhere - that is huge!<br /><br />troop - i wish i had a record of cash singing this! thank you - i don't know - i just always assumed i found a constructive outlet for crazy. (June - um - it is now :))<br /><br />Rachel - thank you - glad you liked it!<br /><br />lfr- *bows* thank you.<br /><br />cat - thanks - though i feel for her too - makes me wonder where her papa was.<br /><br />lgl - you're not in trouble - you can always learn to cook (or find someone who's happy to do it). and why would anyone warn their son away from you? actually - if he doesn't have the sense/spine to stand up for you - better to know that up front, i think. no point in wasting your time. <br /><br />sarah - i'm a little sad for her too - and thank you - i like "layers" better than "confusion" (which is how it feels sometimes)<br /><br />silly girl - ha! so what is right - you may look a little like her - but you are filled with something entirely different. (i knew the cooking thing was going to get me in trouble.:P)<br /><br />k- thank you - i am smiling huge at "literary flamboyance" - wow! i can sorta see a "raising arizona" nic cage delivering this...<br /><br />jannie - i was thinking it might be more lyle lovett - but zz top would rock it - more electric guitar and crunchy riffs - i'm diggin' it..joaquin carvelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03193680725157157864noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7187683434790070953.post-17260850717370552732009-05-13T11:42:00.000-07:002009-05-13T11:42:00.000-07:00To me this could be ZZ Top lyrics. You think?To me this could be ZZ Top lyrics. You think?Jannie Funsterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11595786402510366043noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7187683434790070953.post-63133983989313586352009-05-11T15:04:00.000-07:002009-05-11T15:04:00.000-07:00Joaquin - Excellent vivid images...and just fille...Joaquin - Excellent vivid images...and just filled with literary flamboyance! Great action piece. Your characters are so original! <br /><br />So I told her<br />she was lovely,<br />I was glad<br />she heard me sing,<br />but how’d them skinny fingers<br />ever hold a diamond ring?<br /><br />NOW, I who have to say ---- Merissa said it first, but I agree... I envision a scene from a Coen Brothers movie!!!K.Lawson Gilberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11204234196229710524noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7187683434790070953.post-49336554165294111162009-05-09T02:53:00.000-07:002009-05-09T02:53:00.000-07:00sweet poem!
I have them - skinny fingers, and lo...sweet poem! <br /><br />I have them - skinny fingers, and long brown hair, and ok I dun know how to cook!<br />so what? /:)Silly Girlhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05956429013088620447noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7187683434790070953.post-88264008117675066862009-05-08T11:49:00.000-07:002009-05-08T11:49:00.000-07:00This poem had a great, great voice, Joaquin, and w...This poem had a great, great voice, Joaquin, and was really funny, but it left a lingering bite, too. I'm with Cat--I felt a little sorry for Skinny Fingers. (she could have left a better impression at the end, I grant you ;))<br /><br /><I>black powder in her stare</I>--that line really caught me. There's a spidery kind of sexiness to it--a little ruthless--but also made me think of a melancholy veil obscuring her vision, too. <br /><br />I love the layers in your poems. Even lighter escapades reveal rich and complex emotions. I couldn't help but think there was a smidgen of regret in his loneliness at the end, in spite of his belief in Mamma's words. <br /><br />Thank you for the Mother's Day wishes, too! :)Sarah Hinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13888406261817690010noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7187683434790070953.post-35858359494722160462009-05-08T05:25:00.000-07:002009-05-08T05:25:00.000-07:00you really gave a feel of the place, the lingo, th...you really gave a feel of the place, the lingo, the people... i loved the rhythm :)<br />i'm in trouble. i don't know cuts about cooking. maybe it'll help that my fingers are anything but skinny :(<br /><br />and you reminded me about all the mommas(and papas) who have till date warned their sons about dating me :(Amritorupa Kanjilal https://www.blogger.com/profile/05297857308903060458noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7187683434790070953.post-29263782211479118072009-05-08T04:11:00.000-07:002009-05-08T04:11:00.000-07:00This is fantastic! I could feel the dark shadowy b...This is fantastic! I could feel the dark shadowy bar, and see her eyes watching you play while she nurses that beer with her skinny fingers. I feel bad for her though, and I hope her mama's watching over her too.Catherine Viberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01354073276671196477noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7187683434790070953.post-1337882704662951722009-05-07T21:17:00.000-07:002009-05-07T21:17:00.000-07:00brilliant!!!!! :):)brilliant!!!!! :):)lafemmerevahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16289880109541057584noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7187683434790070953.post-46595078230162904492009-05-07T20:23:00.000-07:002009-05-07T20:23:00.000-07:00Oh, sweet story! I love it! The repetition of the ...Oh, sweet story! I love it! The repetition of the skinny fingers, that just does it.RachelWhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18225401230724459199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7187683434790070953.post-52695188230191502082009-05-07T18:01:00.000-07:002009-05-07T18:01:00.000-07:00HA! LOVE IT! (and HA! I'm here before Mom!)
I cou...HA! LOVE IT! (and HA! I'm here before Mom!)<br /><br />I could swear that I have Johnny Cash singing this on a record somewhere. Joaquin, either you are living a bonafide Coen Brothers screenplay life or you are an visionary genius! How do you make all this stuff up?! More later....<br /><br />(I know that June must be June Carter?)<br />-Troop-trooping with crowshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12607218793470277278noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7187683434790070953.post-55134073919656053872009-05-07T16:27:00.000-07:002009-05-07T16:27:00.000-07:00Your mama was right! Watch out for them skinny li...Your mama was right! Watch out for them skinny little girls:) I love the poem, the voice, and the story. I can hear the guitar with this one, too. You can tell an awesome story, Joaquin. It always makes my day. Thank you!!Juliehttp://www.juliebuff.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7187683434790070953.post-50714822788480196882009-05-07T14:31:00.000-07:002009-05-07T14:31:00.000-07:00You always capture the speaker so well -- love "th...You always capture the speaker so well -- love "them skinny fingers." I know people who talk just like that! You have either a most vivid imagination or a most interesting life story, joaquin. I think it must be a bit of both! <br /><br />I'm glad he recognized this gal "with a voice like June and julep" for what she is. Mama'a always right! <br /><br />("a voice like June and julep" -- WHAT a line). You are a fantastic writer.Karenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12003379181294550035noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7187683434790070953.post-80926422195684290172009-05-07T13:52:00.000-07:002009-05-07T13:52:00.000-07:00Ha! Enjoyed reading this one mate!!! As Aniket wro...Ha! Enjoyed reading this one mate!!! As Aniket wrote, those lines are so very true!!! Great job, as always!!! Keep writing!!!Opaquehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01673267899145564334noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7187683434790070953.post-32383270050282069082009-05-07T10:04:00.000-07:002009-05-07T10:04:00.000-07:00A very happy mothers day!!!
And what a wonderful ...A very happy mothers day!!!<br /><br />And what a wonderful way to say it.<br /><br />"and I recalled<br />my mamma,<br />she’d read ‘em like a book,<br />sayin’ never trust a woman, son,<br />what don’t know how to cook"<br /><br />SO Very True!! :D<br /><br />And now I'll humm the Mulan song 'A girl worth fighting for' coz this so reminded me of it:<br /><br />"The girl I'll love would unlike be any other!"<br />"And the only girl who'll love him... is his mother"<br />"Oh I don't care what she looks like... I only care what she cooks like..."Aniket Thakkarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18311954967682696734noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7187683434790070953.post-42976776371353478082009-05-07T09:09:00.000-07:002009-05-07T09:09:00.000-07:00great read!great read!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com